I already wrote my personal statement. And I just need your help adding a few things in to make it stronger. And also edit out thing that is not necessary.
the Structure of my PS is:
1.Intro

2.My interest- history/background

3.Problems I see in the market how you hope to fix it/what I want to implement = My PLAN

4.specifics about the program  -what I am lacking, what I need to meet my goal, problems I am faced trying and how this program will help me.

5.conclusion 
And the requirement on NYU website is:

Personal Statement

Evaluated for evidence of an applicant’s motivation for admission and fit for the program. Key indicators include:

Demonstrable progress in your academic and/or professional career
Clearly articulated goals and objectives that align with the mission of the program