The essay needs edits according to the feedback below.
- Question: I am not quite sure what they are looking for in terms of how this scholarship would be used. I have had additional expenses compared to an average student and could definitely use to for my tuition and room and board as well as helping my mom out.
Answer feedback: Naing, I checked online under the P.E.O. Scholar Awards policies, procedures, and general information for the correct answer to your question. It states the funds from the scholarship award are to be used for necessary expenses incurred while pursuing a doctoral-level degree; funds are not to be used for debt reduction, either educational or personal. I hope my answer helps clarify your question. - A few of my professors asked what they should focus on in their letter of recommendation. What are some tips and how can they make a strong letter so that it would be a good fit for PEO?
Answer feedback: Again, I checked the policies and procedures online for direction to your question. I believe P.E.O. is looking for the professors to address the quality and future impact of the candidate and her work.
After reading your applications and discussions with Margo, I would like to make the following suggestions:
- You need to strengthen the reason(s) for attending the University of New Mexico. Does the university offer a program in rural health and if so, that should be mentioned.
- Your goal(s) for working in rural health needs to be stronger and more specific. Would it be possible for you to make your "dreams" of the future more engaging? You so aptly describe your past and use those experiences in telling how they shaped your present status as to how you have chosen your educational path. You need to expand your visions of your future paths; bring them to life.
- Your application needs to be more closely edited, especially concerning the correct verb forms. Would it possible for a second person to review your application for editing and general review? Some times another set of eyes is good for the overall process of writing/composing an application.
For No. 1) I would like to add that I attended the University of New Mexico School of Medicine for its focus in rural health. We have a highly ranked program here in primary care and rural health. I am a part of Project ECHO and the Rural and Urban Underserved Program here at UNM. In addition, UNM offers every medical student with 6 weeks of clinical exposure through a summer internship after his/her first year.
- After starting my practice, I would like to start scholarship funds for minority and underserved students at the New Mexico State University, where I went to college. I am also learning the basics of the process of overcoming limits in rural health through the Global Surgery Student Alliance. For instance, our group will be learning about the process of establishing a homeless clinic in NM- rules and regulations, funding sources, and recruitment of medical staff. This would be something I would like to do in the future.