Review feedback on your Essay 1 Draft 1, then write a complete 5-paragraph essay (2.5 to 3 pages) which includes:
- A revised introduction paragraph with a working thesis statement.
- Hook in light yellow
- Background in light red
- Thesis Statement in light green
- Completed, revised, and fully written body paragraphs (Body 1, 2, 3). Each paragraph should include:
- Topic sentence in light blue
- Topic sentence = first sentence of the paragraph
- Supporting details
- Concluding sentence in light blue
- Concluding sentence = last sentence of the paragraph
- Topic sentence in light blue
- A completed and fully written conclusion paragraph.
- Restated Thesis in light green
- Final Thought
- Use MLA format.
I will give you the feedback page and the previous essay, so you have to fix the essay based on the feedback and write the next paragraphs. If you can do it well I will leave a high tip for you.
| Essay Revision Checklist - ESL80 Essay 1 Name: __________________ Directions: Examine your essay and once these things are done correctly, check the box. Do not turn in your essay until you have checked all the boxes! | ||||||
| Big Stuff | Details | Focus Areas | Format | |||
| Hook Exciting, interesting, wiseNot about specific topics from text.Makes readers want to know more Introduction Paragraph Uses a hook (above)Introduces the topic clearly (background info)Leads to a thesis Thesis Generally states writer’sPrevious habitsCurrent goalsPlan to achieveIs only 1 sentenceIs in parallel form ( // ) Body Paragraphs Have a clear topic sentenceHave details from next column ( ------------->)Use appropriate transition words Conclusion Restates ThesisBrings back the image from the hookCovers the “bigger picture” from the bodyHas a “super so what?” at the end | Past Study Habits Writer gives specific examples, stories, facts, etc.Explains a situation, class, or time which represents former habits.Judges whether writer was a good or bad student Current Goals Clarifies writer’s goal(s) for this semester Specific to a single class or to IVC or to collegeFocused mostly on studiesExplains why these goals are important How to Achieve Goals Clarifies newly learned or previously successful techniques to succeed.Provides a clear plan of action.Points out benefits of specific technique(s)Incorporates strategy(ies) from readings and discussions | General Grammar Proper use of articles: “a, the, and ø”Appropriate Verb for tense usage: past, present, futureChecked for subject/verb agreementChecked for numbers: singular and plural forms Spelling Used Spell CheckNo red linesNo guessing at words you haven’t spelled beforeChecked dictionary for new words Unacceptable Words - DELETE Everyone knowsAs ____ knowWell,/ So,Stuff / ThingsActually / Basically “Announcing” language (ex. I will write about, In this essay, I will…) | MLA 12 pt fontTimes New RomanDouble SpacedUsed TAB to indent every paragraphNo space between paragraphs1” margins on all sidesLast Name in headerPage # in headerNo boldCorrect Heading: First and Last Name Professor Seong ESL 80 Date |